Post by InvaderZaTr on Jun 25, 2009 13:03:43 GMT -5
Ok, some of you may hve read my application Zim's Comic, so I got some comments and they were right about it. So I took the time to edit it out and now I am posting the editness. But first, before I post the story, I am warning you that this is a mini story, kinda like The Most Horrible Short Ever. So anyway, I give you the edited version of Zim's Comic!
Zim's comic by InvaderZaTr:
INT. Miss Bitters’ Classroom
Miss Bitters: And there were no survivors. Now children, this week, you horrible children are going to write a script for this man. The winner will have their script turned into a comic and receive a certificate from the mayor.
Zim (to himself)- Hm, if I could win this contest, I could meet the mayor. And once I meet the mayor, I could brain wash him into telling everyone how they must bow down to Zim!
Zim begins to laugh evilly while everyone stares at him
Zim: (cough)
Dib- Zim? You? Write a script? Ha! I’d like to see that!
Zim- Oh, you’ll see, Dib! You’ll all see!
The school bell rings. All the children leave.
EXT. Zim’s Lab
Zim has a pencil and paper in front of him and he is trying to come up with an idea. Gir walks in carrying a mud pie.
Gir: YOU WANT SOME PIE, MASTA!!
Zim- No, Gir. I want an idea for my script!
Gir- HOW ‘BOUT A STORY ABOUT MUD PIES!!
Zim- GIR! LEAVE MY PRESENCE AT ONCE! You’re distracting me!
Gir walks away.
Zim- How can this be so hard! I just need to- I’VE GOT IT!
Zim begins to write a story with a title ‘The Almighty Miz and His Almighty Mission’
Zim (reading what he is writing): Once there was a normal human boy named Miz. He was assigned to a secret mission by his leaders to go conquer a filthy planet called NotEarth. He was also given an advanced robot that he didn’t need at all because he was Almighty and Awesome…
INT. One week later
Zim is holding up his story one morning and saying things to himself like “I am Zim!” and “I will rule all!”.
INT. Miss Bitters’ Classroom
Miss Bitters: So when you children grow up, house prices will be extremely high and so will food prices! Therefore, you will all DIE of hunger and homelessness. Now before we learn about gas prices in the future, I will read you the results for the script writing contest. The winner is… (looks at sheet of paper)…The Almighty Miz and his Almighty Mission.
Zim- YES! YOU WILL ALL BOW TO ZIM!!
Miss Bitters: But that story wasn’t in script format.
Miss Bitters tosses the story in the trash.
Miss Bitters- So the winner is… Melvin’s Trip to the Doctor.
Dib- Melvin’s Trip to the Doctor? What about mine?
Miss Bitters- Oh, you mean the one about the alien that came to Earth to conquer it? That was the most horrible thing I’ve ever read in my life! I had to stop half-way through it.
Melvin- YAY!!
Zim- NOOOOOO!!!!!
Dib (to Zim): Well, I didn’t win, but at least you didn’t either.
Zim: Well I didn’t even try pig-stink! If it was a script, it would’ve won.
Dib: Yea, but it wasn’t. So it didn’t. So HA!
Zim: Fine! Laugh now, Dib! But soon you will know not to laugh at ZIM!!
EXT. Zim’s lab
We see Gir laying on the floor drowned in mud. The camera slowly zooms in on him then fades out.
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Ok. So tell me what you think! Thanks for reading too!
PLHE,
InvaderZaTr
Zim's comic by InvaderZaTr:
INT. Miss Bitters’ Classroom
Miss Bitters: And there were no survivors. Now children, this week, you horrible children are going to write a script for this man. The winner will have their script turned into a comic and receive a certificate from the mayor.
Zim (to himself)- Hm, if I could win this contest, I could meet the mayor. And once I meet the mayor, I could brain wash him into telling everyone how they must bow down to Zim!
Zim begins to laugh evilly while everyone stares at him
Zim: (cough)
Dib- Zim? You? Write a script? Ha! I’d like to see that!
Zim- Oh, you’ll see, Dib! You’ll all see!
The school bell rings. All the children leave.
EXT. Zim’s Lab
Zim has a pencil and paper in front of him and he is trying to come up with an idea. Gir walks in carrying a mud pie.
Gir: YOU WANT SOME PIE, MASTA!!
Zim- No, Gir. I want an idea for my script!
Gir- HOW ‘BOUT A STORY ABOUT MUD PIES!!
Zim- GIR! LEAVE MY PRESENCE AT ONCE! You’re distracting me!
Gir walks away.
Zim- How can this be so hard! I just need to- I’VE GOT IT!
Zim begins to write a story with a title ‘The Almighty Miz and His Almighty Mission’
Zim (reading what he is writing): Once there was a normal human boy named Miz. He was assigned to a secret mission by his leaders to go conquer a filthy planet called NotEarth. He was also given an advanced robot that he didn’t need at all because he was Almighty and Awesome…
INT. One week later
Zim is holding up his story one morning and saying things to himself like “I am Zim!” and “I will rule all!”.
INT. Miss Bitters’ Classroom
Miss Bitters: So when you children grow up, house prices will be extremely high and so will food prices! Therefore, you will all DIE of hunger and homelessness. Now before we learn about gas prices in the future, I will read you the results for the script writing contest. The winner is… (looks at sheet of paper)…The Almighty Miz and his Almighty Mission.
Zim- YES! YOU WILL ALL BOW TO ZIM!!
Miss Bitters: But that story wasn’t in script format.
Miss Bitters tosses the story in the trash.
Miss Bitters- So the winner is… Melvin’s Trip to the Doctor.
Dib- Melvin’s Trip to the Doctor? What about mine?
Miss Bitters- Oh, you mean the one about the alien that came to Earth to conquer it? That was the most horrible thing I’ve ever read in my life! I had to stop half-way through it.
Melvin- YAY!!
Zim- NOOOOOO!!!!!
Dib (to Zim): Well, I didn’t win, but at least you didn’t either.
Zim: Well I didn’t even try pig-stink! If it was a script, it would’ve won.
Dib: Yea, but it wasn’t. So it didn’t. So HA!
Zim: Fine! Laugh now, Dib! But soon you will know not to laugh at ZIM!!
EXT. Zim’s lab
We see Gir laying on the floor drowned in mud. The camera slowly zooms in on him then fades out.
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Ok. So tell me what you think! Thanks for reading too!
PLHE,
InvaderZaTr