Post by InvaderZaTr on Jun 16, 2009 18:39:54 GMT -5
Ok, before I begin I wanted to say something to Scoo is Coo. I couldn't reply to this on the other thread because...yea...that. Anyway, she said the appearance of Tak in this story was strange. I just wanted to say, you're right, it is. But I couldn't think of any other enemy of Zim's, plus the whole "I'm part of the class" thing worked out nicely, so I'm sorry I couldn't change that. Secondly, she said it was kinda strange how Tak poisened the meat cake knowing that Zim wasn't going to eat it anyway. Well, I was thinking about that, and I thought that she really connected with Dib (though I despise DaTr) and got to know him before he knew she was Irken. So I thought that she was pretty smart so she would know that Dib would get Zim to eat the cake so Zim could keep his title as "human". That's why I didn't change it. So here's my edited version of Zim's Birthday.
Zim's Birhday by: InvaderZaTr:
INT. Miss Bitters’ Class
Class except Zim (singing off key): Happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday, dear Melvin. HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOOOOOUUU!!
Melvin: YAA! WOOH! And for ma birthday, I brought cupcakes! WOOH!
Dib (to Zim): When’s your birthday, Zim? Huh? Oh, that’s right, you don’t have one, because you’re an alien and you were probably created by a computer or somethin’!
Miss Bitters: Yes, Zim. When is you’re birthday. It’s not in my records.
Zim: Why, it’s…um…TOMORROW! Ya, um, I’m just too modest to mention it.
Zim smiles a smile bigger than his face.
INT. Zim’s laboratory
Zim is looking up information on birthdays. We see slides go by with titles like “How to Make a Perfect Birthday Cake” and “Want the Best Birthday Party in the World?” We also see pictures of kids wearing party hats with presents and cakes.
INT. Zim’s Kitchen
Zim (looking at cake recipe that is labeled “Exploding Cake!”): Two cups of flour, six table spoons of sugar… WHAT KIND OF FILTHY FOOD IS THIS! Zim shall bake his own cake!
We zoom out to Zim’s kitchen door later and hear Zim laughing maniacally and see sparks flying out the door. We see Dib in Zim’s window disguised as a tree taking notes.
We see the words “46 Tries Later” appear on screen. Zim opens his oven and a cake monster comes out roaring. Gir walks in, looks at it, and then eats it in one bite, then walks out.
INT. Three Hours Later
We see Zim holding a cake that is glowing green.
Zim: With this cake, all those filthy humans will EXPLOAD ON THE INSIDE!! MUHAHAHAHAHAHA!! I am Zim…
INT. Miss Bitters’ Room the Next Day
Class: (Sings Happy Birthday to Zim off key once more)
Zim: Hehe, ya, anyway, I, uh, brought cake.
Class: YAAAAYYY!
The class eats the green glowing cake except Dib who just stares at his piece with an eyebrow raised.
Dib (to Zim): Ok, fine, you may have convinced them it’s your birthday, but not me. Everyone has a party on their birthday, Zim. Where’s your party gonna be? Hmmm?
Zim: Of course I’m having a party. It will be at, uh, Mac Meaty’s tonight at 7:00, and the whole class is invited!
Class: YAAAAA- (The entire class explodes on the inside but miraculously come back to life) – AAAAAAAY!!!
Zim: NOOOOOO!!!
As the scene ends, we see Dib pushing his cake away with a disgusted look on his face.
INT. Mac Meaty’s
We see the entire class partying their butts off to loud guitar sounds and drums in the background. Everyone is having a good time until the doors slam open and everyone sees…Tak!
Tak: I’m here for the party!
Zim: You weren’t invited!
Tak: Yes I was. You said the entire class was invited. I’m part of the class, aren’t I?
We see everyone nodding there heads going “Ya. Mmmhmm. She’s right.”
Zim: But I launched you into space!
Tak: So that automatically excludes me from the class?
Zim is silent. The guitars begin to play again and everyone goes back to their partying. We see Tak slip off screen into the kitchen.
INT. Kitchen
Tak spots the meat cake the staff is making for Zim and poisons it. She laughs maniacally then quickly slips away.
INT. Da Party
The staff people bring out Zim cake. Everyone in the restaurant begins to sing Happy Birthday to Zim. Everyone gets a slice and walks to a table. Tak is sitting at a table pretending to eat her cake but just throws it somewhere.
Random Kid: Ow!
Dib (to Zim): What’s the matter, Zim? Don’t like meat cakes?
Zim: Nonsense! I love meat! Especially in cake form.
Zim slowly brings a bite of cake to his mouth. His tongue touches it and he pukes.
Tak: NOOOO! MY POISON!
Tak covers her mouth immediately after she speaks.
Zim: You poisoned it?
Tak: No, uh, maybe, uh… MIMI!
Mimi flies in and Tak rides her out.
Dib: Ha! She put poison in your cake! Heh heh… wait. Didn’t I eat some of that cake?
Dib looks around and sees everyone on the ground passed out.
Dib: Uh-oh
Dib passes out.
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Ok, that's it. Hopefully... hopefully I'll styop using the word hopefully every time I make a story. lol. Thanx for reading!
PLHE,
InvaderZaTr
Zim's Birhday by: InvaderZaTr:
INT. Miss Bitters’ Class
Class except Zim (singing off key): Happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday, dear Melvin. HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOOOOOUUU!!
Melvin: YAA! WOOH! And for ma birthday, I brought cupcakes! WOOH!
Dib (to Zim): When’s your birthday, Zim? Huh? Oh, that’s right, you don’t have one, because you’re an alien and you were probably created by a computer or somethin’!
Miss Bitters: Yes, Zim. When is you’re birthday. It’s not in my records.
Zim: Why, it’s…um…TOMORROW! Ya, um, I’m just too modest to mention it.
Zim smiles a smile bigger than his face.
INT. Zim’s laboratory
Zim is looking up information on birthdays. We see slides go by with titles like “How to Make a Perfect Birthday Cake” and “Want the Best Birthday Party in the World?” We also see pictures of kids wearing party hats with presents and cakes.
INT. Zim’s Kitchen
Zim (looking at cake recipe that is labeled “Exploding Cake!”): Two cups of flour, six table spoons of sugar… WHAT KIND OF FILTHY FOOD IS THIS! Zim shall bake his own cake!
We zoom out to Zim’s kitchen door later and hear Zim laughing maniacally and see sparks flying out the door. We see Dib in Zim’s window disguised as a tree taking notes.
We see the words “46 Tries Later” appear on screen. Zim opens his oven and a cake monster comes out roaring. Gir walks in, looks at it, and then eats it in one bite, then walks out.
INT. Three Hours Later
We see Zim holding a cake that is glowing green.
Zim: With this cake, all those filthy humans will EXPLOAD ON THE INSIDE!! MUHAHAHAHAHAHA!! I am Zim…
INT. Miss Bitters’ Room the Next Day
Class: (Sings Happy Birthday to Zim off key once more)
Zim: Hehe, ya, anyway, I, uh, brought cake.
Class: YAAAAYYY!
The class eats the green glowing cake except Dib who just stares at his piece with an eyebrow raised.
Dib (to Zim): Ok, fine, you may have convinced them it’s your birthday, but not me. Everyone has a party on their birthday, Zim. Where’s your party gonna be? Hmmm?
Zim: Of course I’m having a party. It will be at, uh, Mac Meaty’s tonight at 7:00, and the whole class is invited!
Class: YAAAAA- (The entire class explodes on the inside but miraculously come back to life) – AAAAAAAY!!!
Zim: NOOOOOO!!!
As the scene ends, we see Dib pushing his cake away with a disgusted look on his face.
INT. Mac Meaty’s
We see the entire class partying their butts off to loud guitar sounds and drums in the background. Everyone is having a good time until the doors slam open and everyone sees…Tak!
Tak: I’m here for the party!
Zim: You weren’t invited!
Tak: Yes I was. You said the entire class was invited. I’m part of the class, aren’t I?
We see everyone nodding there heads going “Ya. Mmmhmm. She’s right.”
Zim: But I launched you into space!
Tak: So that automatically excludes me from the class?
Zim is silent. The guitars begin to play again and everyone goes back to their partying. We see Tak slip off screen into the kitchen.
INT. Kitchen
Tak spots the meat cake the staff is making for Zim and poisons it. She laughs maniacally then quickly slips away.
INT. Da Party
The staff people bring out Zim cake. Everyone in the restaurant begins to sing Happy Birthday to Zim. Everyone gets a slice and walks to a table. Tak is sitting at a table pretending to eat her cake but just throws it somewhere.
Random Kid: Ow!
Dib (to Zim): What’s the matter, Zim? Don’t like meat cakes?
Zim: Nonsense! I love meat! Especially in cake form.
Zim slowly brings a bite of cake to his mouth. His tongue touches it and he pukes.
Tak: NOOOO! MY POISON!
Tak covers her mouth immediately after she speaks.
Zim: You poisoned it?
Tak: No, uh, maybe, uh… MIMI!
Mimi flies in and Tak rides her out.
Dib: Ha! She put poison in your cake! Heh heh… wait. Didn’t I eat some of that cake?
Dib looks around and sees everyone on the ground passed out.
Dib: Uh-oh
Dib passes out.
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Ok, that's it. Hopefully... hopefully I'll styop using the word hopefully every time I make a story. lol. Thanx for reading!
PLHE,
InvaderZaTr